Another String To The Storyline

We added the phonecall, we edited the phonecall, we watched the phonecall along with the rest of our trailer and it works.... BUT, as well as the quality being pretty rubbish and therefore we need to re-film it, we feel that we need yet ANOTHER string to the storyline. Why does the main character go in to the church? Is it obvious enough that her sister is no where to be seen?

So...

We want to add some more reaction shots of the main character looking around and seeing nothing but empty space. We also want a note left by the kidnapper that says "Church. 10pm. Be There." To make it more obvious as to why she goes into the church.

Our idea:

Shot of note falling to the floor

Reaction shot

Close up of note so that the audience can read it.

Reaction shot

Empty space

Reaction shot

Empty space

*Sound Of Church Bell*

Reaction Shot

Shot of Clock "10pm"

This may change but it's our idea so far!

H&M